#1 2008-08-09 09:40:58
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someday you'll be mine! (chapter 5) [taglish!]
hi everyone, this is my very first time writing a story.. criticisms, suggestions, comments are highly appreciated!
im hoping you'll enjoy reading my story!
First day of class. I'm sitting on the bench in our school campus waiting for my girlfriends. Dito kasi tambayan namin since highschool.. Same kami ng sched in all the subjects kasi same din kami ng course. Hahaha.. plinano talaga namin to..
Mitch: Morning trix! (beso-beso).. aga mo ah! excited??
Trixie: d masyado.. san na sina mel and cath?? tagal nila ah.. baka malate tayo nito.. first day pa nman..
Mitch: maya-maya darating na mga yun.. retouch muna tayo!
Trixie: Oh ayan na pala sila.. maya na tayo magretouch.. pretty pa nman tayo eh..
Mel: hi girls! eksakt0 dating namin ah.. 10 mins na alng 10.30 na.. c'mon let's go!
Cath: halina kayo! let's see if may gwapo ba tayong classmate sa first subject natin..
So pumunta na nga kami sa room namin.. pagpasok na pagpasok namin, we catch everyone's attention!
they are really shock with our beauty.. (naxx!hehe) honestly, sabi nila puro kami magaganda.. totoo naman! kaya hindi na kami nagtaka kung ganun reaction nila nang makita kaming apat..Cath: hoi mitch lipat ka dito sa likod ko.. layo mo ah!
Mitch: (naglakad patungo sa likod ni cath) sorry na! ang gwapo kasi nun oh.. (tinuro ung guy na may kausap sa phone!) gosh! i love him nah!
Trixie: goodness! you're damn right.. he's so handsome and hot!
kilala mo na bah?Mitch: Oh kitams? Sau na lang yan trix! baka pagalitan paku ng honey ko nyan eh.. his name is renz!
Mel: trix, what are you waiting for? magpakilala ka na dun! bilis! (sabay tulak sakin!)
Eksakto naman na wala na syang kausap sa phone kaya sinunggaban ko nah!
Trixie: (pa.shy effect pa!) hi there!
Renz: yes??
Trixie: uhmm, transferee ka ba? ngayon lang kita nakita eh..
Renz: yeahh..
Trixie: classmates tayo, im trixie (sabay abot ng hand!)
Renz: Renz Villa.. nice to meet you miss montebello..
Trixie: just call me trix.. ok?
Renz: sure! (sabay tingin from my head to foot!)
Trixie: excuse me??? why??? did i pass on your standards?
renz: hindi ka ba giniginaw??
Trixie: what???
renz: i said hindi ka ba giniginaw?? kinukulang ka yata kasi ng tela eh..
trixie:
hindi! bagay naman sakin dbah mr villa?? renz: kala mo ba pretty ka?? para kang bakla sa suot mo eh..
trixie: owzz talaga?? siguruhin mo lang na hindi ka maiinlove sa beauty ko ah.. yabang mo! (sabay talikod!)
Mitch: hey! what happened?? parang galit na galit ka ah..
Trixie: Galit na galit na galit na galit!
Cath: feeling ko sasabog na ang bulkang pinatrixie.. lord save us!
Mel: psstt.. quiet na.. anjan na si sir!
after the class.. pumunta na kami sa canteen to have our lunch!
Mitch: hoi! ano bang nangyari kanina? huh?
Trixie: lam nyo girls?? siya lang ang kaunaunahang lalaking nangsnob sa beauty ko! magbabayad siya!
Mitch: bakit bah?? ano bang sabi nya?
Trixie:(so i start telling the whole story!) grabeh talaga dibah?
Cath: so what's your plan?
Trixie: i dont know yet.. basta kakainin nya talaga sinabi niyah!
Mel: Go trixie! we'll support you!
Mitch: cge girl, susuportahan ka namin..
Trixie: abah! dapat lang!
Mel: teka, bat ba nagkakagulo sila? (sabay turo sa grupo ng mga kababaihan)
mitch: ewan!
Trixie: excuse me miss! bakit ba nagkakagulo dun?? (tanong sa babae na galing dun)
girl: (kinikilig) may gwapo kasi dun eh.. super gwapo.. siya yata yung bagong basketball captain!
Lumakas lalo ang tilian ng mga girls ng tumayo na yung guy! Nabigla kami nang makilala namin kung sino yung guy at naglalakad patungo sa'min!
to be continued.. :Dtaglidh
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#2 2008-08-09 12:03:50
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Re: someday you'll be mine! (chapter 5) [taglish!]
wow..frst one to cmment..heheh
very interestng story girl! 
come on..upd8 na..hehehe..
gnda e..i'll w8 4 it!
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#3 2008-08-09 12:58:10
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Re: someday you'll be mine! (chapter 5) [taglish!]
WOW! Bad pala ng attitude ng girl noh?
my favorite
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#4 2008-08-09 13:29:24
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Re: someday you'll be mine! (chapter 5) [taglish!]
wow! a nice story u've got! just continue posting!!!
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#5 2008-08-09 13:51:48
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Re: someday you'll be mine! (chapter 5) [taglish!]
xxGiRL NeXT DooRxx wrote:
wow..frst one to cmment..heheh
very interestng story girl!
come on..upd8 na..hehehe..
gnda e..i'll w8 4 it!
.. enx gurL.. iL update it tomorrow na lang! hehehe..
enx talaga!
njblxii wrote:
WOW! Bad pala ng attitude ng girl noh?
..d nmn sa danun girl, may pagkamataray lng talaga at conceited,, heheh
mystic rain wrote:
wow! a nice story u've got! just continue posting!!!
..enx sis.. kk iL continue posting if i have time..
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#7 2008-08-10 02:27:18
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Re: someday you'll be mine! (chapter 5) [taglish!]
waa.
sis.
yong nym n renz!
klasmate cuh yan!
jiji..
tugmah tlga!
kaya lng bitin masyadoh yong apelyedoh moh!
d moh natuloy!
jiji..
renz villa
gnyn tlga yong nym
and lastnym niya!
peo.may continuation
yong lastnym niya!
wahahaha....
galing nng story nato!
aabngn ko nah nmn!
jiji..
kip it up!
update nah!
ajaa,,!
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#8 2008-08-10 03:33:41
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Re: someday you'll be mine! (chapter 5) [taglish!]
jykaaa wrote:
It's cute. Abangan ko to.
salamat sis! hehehe.,. abangan mo huh.. hehe
Cutie_Phunk wrote:
waa.
sis.
yong nym n renz!
klasmate cuh yan!
jiji..
tugmah tlga!
kaya lng bitin masyadoh yong apelyedoh moh!
d moh natuloy!
jiji..
renz villa
gnyn tlga yong nym
and lastnym niya!
peo.may continuation
yong lastnym niya!
wahahaha....
galing nng story nato!
aabngn ko nah nmn!
jiji..
kip it up!
update nah!
ajaa,,!
sure ka sis?? hahaha..
oo nga eh, meJu bitin ung fam name,
nag-isip kasi me ng magandang fam name
eh wala na tlga akUng maisip..
update ku to mamaya.. hehe
thnx for reading pala! hehe
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#9 2008-08-12 10:07:55
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Re: someday you'll be mine! (chapter 5) [taglish!]
znelc27 wrote:
sure ka sis?? hahaha..
oo nga eh, meJu bitin ung fam name,
nag-isip kasi me ng magandang fam name
eh wala na tlga akUng maisip..
update ku to mamaya.. hehe
thnx for reading pala! hehe
yah sis,em xure!
jiji..
101% xure!
jiji..
uo ngah!bitin masyadoh yong
fam.nym!
jiji..
nxt chappie na sis!
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#10 2008-08-12 12:33:57
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Re: someday you'll be mine! (chapter 5) [taglish!]
Cutie_Phunk wrote:
yah sis,em xure!
jiji..
101% xure!
jiji..
uo ngah!bitin masyadoh yong
fam.nym!
jiji..
nxt chappie na sis!
heheh.. kk sis here's the 2nd chapter..
sowie f mejU delayed!
Trixie’s POV
OMG. He’s so damn gorgeous. Patungo siya sa upuan namin but then reality snap me. Muntik ko nang makalimutan na sya ung guy na nangsnob sa beauty ko. Bakit ba ganito, I feel metamorphosis in my stomach. Gosh! As in napanganga talaga ako sa sex appeal niya! No wonder nagtitilian ang mga girls kanina.. But then I need to hide that I really admire him, I must!
Mitch: Hi renz.. sikat mo ah! Wanna join us?
Renz: Oh sure!
Cath: Girls, may lakad pa kme ni Mel. Absent muna kami sa next class natin! Bye everyone!
Mitch and Trixie: Bye!
Renz: Cge girlz, go ahead baka magalit pa mga kadate nyo..
Mitch: oo nga! hahahah
Renz: (laugh!) uhmm, Ms Montebello, are you ok?? Tahimik ka yata!
Trixie:
paki mo! Wala ako sa mood magsalita kapag mukhang unggoy kaharap ko! 
Renz: Sungit mo naman! mukha bang unggoy ang mukhang to?
Titig na titig ka nga sakin kanina eh.. kala mo d ko napansin?? Trixie: In your dreams Mr. Villa! Goodness. Napansin pala nya un! Kakahiya!
Renz: bakit ba hindi ka man lang marunong magsmile? Lalo kang pumapangit ah! Diba mitch?
Mitch: Uy, galit na yang friend ko.. tigilan mo na yan renz, madali yang mapikon!
Renz: oopss sorry.. kaya pala namumula na sa galit!
Trixie’s POV
Hindi ko na talaga matake to! Inis na inis na inis na talaga ko! Kunting pasensya na lang trix. Kunti na lang!
Mitch: Hala ka renz, lagot ka! Ginalit mo masyado!
Trixie: It’s ok mitch..
I know namn eh bakit nya ko inaasar at bakit feeling close siya sa pang-aasar sakin kahit na kanina pa lang naman kami nagkakilala!Renz: Owss? Talaga?? Tingin mo bakit??
Trixie: That’s just your way to hide that you really like me and find me pretty.. am I right mr renz villa??
(wearing my cutest smile!)Lalong pinainit ng demonyong to ang ulo ko plus si mitch imbes na kampihan ako eh, nanahimik na lang may patext2 pa! bwesit talaga!
Renz: You are so conceited Ms. Montebello.. you really think lahat ng guys eh maiinluv sa baklang beauty mo! Uy, hindi ako tulad nila noh!
Mitch: Uy renz, below the belt na yan ah!
Trixie:
at akala mo naman kung sino kang gwapo! Mukha ka ngang unggoy eh. Ewan ko ba bakit ang raming girls na bulag at humanga sa unggoy mong face! Renz: Ung--
Mitch: hep, hep, hep.. tama na yan.. ok?? Trix, una na ko sau ah.. nagtext kasi honey ko nagyaya manood ng sine! Bye girl..
Trixie: Mitch naman, iiwan mo ko with this guy?
Mitch: Harmless naman yan trix! Bye na.. umabsent ka na lang rin kaya!
Trixie: Ok, sa library na lang ako.. lam mu na baka magsumbong pa kuya ko pag nalaman na umabsent ako!
Mitch: Oh sige, bye girl! Uy Renz ingatan mo yan ah.. wag mo asarin!
Renz: Sure! (todo smile!)
Mitch: you take care! Bye!
pagkatalikod ni Mitch, tumayo na rin ako. D ko kasi talaga carry ang taong nasa harap ko! Nwala talaga appetie ko! As iN!
Renz: hoy pangit, san ka pupunta?
Trixie: anong paki mo unggoy ka??
Then, umalis na ko.. iniwan kong unggoy na yun!
Renz’ POV
Haayyy trixie! You’re the most beautiful lady I’ve ever known. That saucy tongue of yours makes you sexier and prettier! Ang ganda mo talaga kapag nagagalit ka na! nakakainluv ka!
i am in the library, waiting for my next class. grabeh, i feel that there's something really different.. ano ba to?? bakit siya iniisip ko?? bakit ung unggoy pang yun?? wahhh kainis! but infairness, he's really good looking.. i'll make him fall for me!
*****RINGGG!!*******
The bell rang. Time for me to go to my next subject.. naglalakad ako patungo sa next room ko nang biglang may...
To be continued..
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Re: someday you'll be mine! (chapter 5) [taglish!]
weeeeeh!.
renz vill?!
hahah..
mlpit sa neym ng classm8 coe!
hehhe..
c renz villarubia!
hehehe.
classm8 nmin ni cutie_phunk!
heheheh...
hahahahaah... lolengzs!
kilig naman ng story nah touh!
natawa acoe!
haha
aabangan coe toh sis!
hehehe.
kip it up!
i lyk dis s2ry!
~juliene~
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open the spoiler..
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akuzet16 wrote:
weeeeeh!.
renz vill?!
hahah..
mlpit sa neym ng classm8 coe!
hehhe..
c renz villarubia!
hehehe.
classm8 nmin ni cutie_phunk!
heheheh...
btt: i think ung captain is si renz!
hahahahaah... lolengzs!
kilig naman ng story nah touh!
natawa acoe!
haha
~juliene~
.. enx f0r reading sis!
graveh naman.. hahahahahh
baka meron din kaung classmate na
trixie sis?? hehehehe..
natawa talaga ako ah..
buti na lang hndi villarubia fam name
ng character dun sa story ko.. hahhahahaha
gwapo ba yang renz na
classmate nyo sis??
bka mainspired ako lalo..
joke! hehehe
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znelc27 wrote:
heheh.. kk sis here's the 2nd chapter..
sowie f mejU delayed!
uo ngah sis!
bitin peo.
cute nilang dlwa!
palaging nag-aaway!
jiji..
akuzet16 wrote:
weeeeeh!.
renz vill?!
hahah..
mlpit sa neym ng classm8 coe!
hehhe..
c renz villarubia!
hehehe.
classm8 nmin ni cutie_phunk!
heheheh...
uo ngah!
yan sabi ko sis znelc27,
siya yong klasmate nmn
nah malapit na sa nym ni
renz vill moh!
jiji..
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Re: someday you'll be mine! (chapter 5) [taglish!]
weeeeeeh...update na..hahha..gnda...
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Re: someday you'll be mine! (chapter 5) [taglish!]
Cutie_Phunk wrote:
uo ngah!
yan sabi ko sis znelc27,
siya yong klasmate nmn
nah malapit na sa nym ni
renz vill moh!
jiji..
woie, i read your post on the
bisdak section! ehehe..
at least now i know,
im not the only bisdak here!
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xxGiRL NeXT DooRxx wrote:
weeeeeeh...update na..hahha..gnda...
kk, iL update it but
some other time
na lang, im kinda bz eh.. eheheh
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Re: someday you'll be mine! (chapter 5) [taglish!]
znelc27 wrote:
awtz, danun ba sis?? heheheh
woie, i read your post on the
bisdak section! ehehe..
at least now i know,
im not the only bisdak here!
jiji,,
yeah sis ganon tlgah yon!
mmn..??
sa bisaya corner?
yeah,mdameh tayo dito
mga bisdak!
ha!3..
@T:
wee.
sis kelan moh
euupdate?
still waiting 4 it!
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Re: someday you'll be mine! (chapter 5) [taglish!]
bz for midterms.. huhuhu
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Re: someday you'll be mine! (chapter 5) [taglish!]
Hey nice update good job!
Take care by the way Your really good at this!!
Im just asking ok?
Can you pls check my story!
If you want only here just click on this :
http://friendstertalk.com/t38614-%26%23 … 21%21.html
Thanks ! Good luck with your story!
Oh yah! Pls update more! Your story is really nice talaga!
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Re: someday you'll be mine! (chapter 5) [taglish!]
weeeee.nice storii you've got here siz.haha.updateeeeeeee.
^perst time.haha.lol.xD
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